I tried to write a book (1 Viewer)

[daguywithdashadow]

heres my sad, sad attempt

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Bh0aczlkkw9KRTCNapAtePrCEXVBpbFIWJvzNFSxfVI

"No Eyes, No Teeth" was meant to be this horror story about this bunch of guys who are investigating the disappearance of their drinking buddy. They then discover its connected to this horrific monster (Slenderman, because fuck it) haunting the town and eventually, this scientist's failed lab experiment. I gave up around a quarter of the way in, but if you'd like to salvage it - feel free, I guess.

 

[TreatFly]

Slenderman porno that could work.

 

[Mertes]

I guess I could throw in a word at this. I am a person who likes to write and come up with stories, that's basically the best thing I could do. Just make up a character and start writing stuff or just a whole novel. I've never tried writing a book, but the thought has crossed my mind a couple of times.

I of course read it, it really caught my attention and was really interesting. The part in the end of Chapter 1 got me goosebumps, really! Your writing skills are amazing and I give you a thumbs up for that. In my own opinion, I think you should continue, maybe not right away though. Sometimes, it is good to take some breaks, could be long or short, it makes your mind think more about what you've written and much else. My suggestion is that James is a policeman, officer or detective that researches in these kinds of departments and should be the key character to try to find out who this strange figure is. Along with that, Lucas is the key character, but not really an antagonist, consider him like the Hulk who is not being in this body on his own accord and tries to flee cops because he does not want to die, like you've currently written so far.

I wish you good luck and hope that you continue it and eventually finish it. I find it really entertaining.

 

[EvoWarrior5]

I read the first chapter and a tiny bit into the second chapter. It looks like it has potential; if you play it right you might be able to turn it into a compelling and eloquent story.

Your writing is pretty good but, moving away from spelling or grammatical mistakes, every so often I read something and my mind gets ticked off because it does not sound credible. If you would like somebody to comment on your work (if you do decide to continue, of course), I would be willing to do so and help you a bit. I have not written all that much myself - only about four short stories (well, one of which is nearly 20 pages) and I also have made an attempt at a novel (which I have not worked on in fucking ages) - but I have some experience.

 

[PandaASDF]

Slenderman porno that could work.

Don't forget tentacles

 

[EvoWarrior5]

For some reason I could not edit my previous post (it said that "the time (5 minutes) to edit it has expired", what the fuck?) so I will just put this in a new post:

In general I would advise you to continue, if only because writing is a great experience, unlike anything else. I feel like, apart from being fun, it has a positive effect on the brain in various ways.

 

[Da Random]

Don't forget tentacles

*ahem*

Spoiler: NSFW

(Did you seriously expect me to put explicit material on the forums? )

 

[PandaASDF]

*ahem*

Spoiler: NSFW

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I got trolled ;-;

 

[Da Random]

I got trolled ;-;

git rekt m8

 

[RIS`]

Please continue.

 

[CiroBishop]

Don't forget tentacles

In that way it won't go on libraries but on R '34.

 

[Uncle Lance]

Noice
ps add some hentai 4 me :3

 

[CiroBishop]

Anyway, if you publish that book in some way, it will be a useless for the entire Literature, even if is for "funny", for "kids" or other.
The actual Global Literature needs something to make people learn what they are doing bad, the problems of the world (Like my poems) and do you write an entire book about Slenderman and other not important things.
Sapere Aude! Go learn something else and write a nice book or poem about a good argument and I will be happy to help you.

 

[EvoWarrior5]

Anyway, if you publish that book in some way, it will be a useless for the entire Literature, even if is for "funny", for "kids" or other.
The actual Global Literature needs something to make people learn what they are doing bad, the problems of the world (Like my poems) and do you write an entire book about Slenderman and other not important things.
Sapere Aude! Go learn something else and write a nice book or poem about a good argument and I will be happy to help you.

You could not possibly have sounded more rude, stupid, and self-centered here. Of all your shitty content on this forum, this post has topped my list of your worst.

 

[CiroBishop]

You could not possibly have sounded more rude, stupid, and self-centered here. Of all your shitty content on this forum, this post has topped my list of your worst.

That's my opinion, dear.

 

[MercyOnly]

That's my opinion, dear.

Instead of posting constructive feedback, you stealthily advertise your own poems under a shit opinion that's completely useless.

Just stop posting if your self-centered, narrow-minded self can't do any good without pissing off the majority.

 

[CiroBishop]

Ok, my opinion mk.II.
Constructive Criticism.
You shoud write a good poem or book about something helpful for people who read it, something to learn or a moral to take a lesson about life etc., an horror story about Slenderman & Co. would be useless even for who likes that genre, because not of your own, but for the lose of originality.

 

[daguywithdashadow]

After checking the votes, just, by one vote, people want me to continue this book. Since I've got a spare week, I probably will. Also, this book is about as serious as a horror novel about Slenderman can be

But part of me, really wanted to write a Slenderman porno. You never know